Draft Two

For my draft two I didnt had to fix a few things. I had to re-read my paper out loud to myself to fix a lot of grammer errors, and make sure everything sounded okay. Next I had to add a lot more descriptive words. I really tried to make it so the reader could feel what I was writing and understand the situation a lot better. For my proposal essay... I have a lot of work to do. I need to add my works cited page if i can figure that out, and include proof/supporting sentence for all of my paragraphs.